unusual tag;-)

"She ran her hands over his face, his hair, tears streaming down her face all the while..."
well dhruv had asked me to take this tag long bk,bt i gt late...nw here it is. i hav to complete the story...lemme try...hp m able to write smthing;-)
1st dec, 5 pm...here he comes to meet her with yet another problem of his, which she has to solve...
' nw that we have known each other for years, m fed up of u listening to my sappy stories', he said.
:-? ' what is it now, m waiting to hear frm u', she said.
" i hav been thinkin all this while that i need to grow up" he said.
'' soooo...."??? wondering what is he upto?
he continued.." i know u have been there n will always be, but i want to withdraw without hurting u"..... before she could think or speak something...he said, "i know its all my loss... u were my best friend..... i stand nowhr close to you... but my expectations hav changed"
there was silence around..as if evrything hd stopped fr a few mins...
she knew he had wandered many a times before also, but had come back...
this time,it sounded n seemed different... thr ws something, sm kind of wish he wanted her to accept.
deep down she knew, this time if she lets him go...she may loose him forever.
"so u want to move on in life, dats all?", she said.
"hmmm..." dats all he could say.
(he ws expecting her to stop him n ask fr explanations....she could read his mind)
bt she knew he wont b able to do it...so
"i think u r rite...go ahead...byeeee :-)", she said with her silent tears.
"bye"...
now ..."she ran her hands over his face, his hair, tears streaming down her face all the while", holding onto his snap....shes missing him...!! (but contented as that ws wat they chose)

18 Comments:
Nice...but dnt u think she shudnt waste any more tears on him?
nice story.
and nicely perceived tht statement. so true .. and quite painful.
pssibly mirage is rite ... its hard though.
finally you did it :)
"he ws expecting her to stop him n ask fr explanations....she could read his mind"
i dont know but is it really true that girls can read boys inside out..
my mom and sis are able to do it prefectly on me..n i though i have tried it hard never been able to read their mind..;)
beautiful piece...and move on as they say..
but i guess in these things you just are not able to move on..these thoughts remain with you ..all you can do is bury them inside deep..n hope evythin turns out fine..
but nice tag :)
mirage- i hp she realises it soon :-)
anuj - definitely its hard fr d one who actually goes through such trauma.
dhruv - yes we can, most of d times..specially if we r actually close to u ;-)
n thanx.
i like your blog!!
nicely written...i think i agree with Megha.....she probably should realize he isn't worth all that pain...
hey milo nice post as always...and i wont say wat she shd've done n wat she shd'nt coz the she is probably u n i guess u'd kno better wat to do...but hey i tel u as shahrukh puts it in MHN
"yeh duniya nafrat keliye bahut choti hai",so dont cultivate negative thoughts even if the other party made u feel bad-it jus takes a heavy toll on u...so forget n forgive-jo naseeb mein likha hai woh hi hoga...and as u kno,bade bade deshon mein...
hmmm nice kahaani.i'll wait to see where it takes us readers.
rohit - :-)
monk - hp she realises it sn.
cherubic- she is nt 'me'... i were suppose to write smthing fr d tag, dats wat i did...bt yea d story is close to my heart coz m d originator;-)
insane - thanku.. n whr do u readers want to go?? lol ;-)
TOUCHING!! very TOUCHING ...
TOUCHE!!!!
thanks for visiting my blog!
goodwill - thanku soo much...
oh nice...
i loved the last line in the brackets.
remove the brackets. that line's not less significant.
hmm... i guess the story was abt moving on... :-)
OMG!! Thats all I can say because this is so true!!
u have to make choices at every stage of life, and often u look back at it and wonder was i correct? would things be different? would they be better if...
its gud that shes content, not regretting her decision and thats how life shld move on
...something happened n' nobody understood it... it was confusing and people started jumping to conclusions.... but there're no more absolutes.... time-space...good-evil... the things we know-the things we don't know... we believe in the things we see... we thought we understood these things but maybe we don't...everythin remains..a bit unexplained...
strange it is...for sometimes everything seems so perfect...as it goes...just like a smooth runnin windmill...they say...when the chemistry is great... when the passion is intense... when the love is strong.... it's time for... breaking up...everythin seems to go on forever...when everythin ends..just like that!...
p.s. just for the record...that was some great writin by you!...**he bows to acknowledge the writer**
ze- thanku!! n yes last line is indeed very imp.
jithu- yes..one has to move on.. i tried to explain dat evn if thr r bad exeriences,,u cant stop livin..memories remain.bt u hav to live..so take ech moment as it comes.
kroopa - :-)welcm bk.
zxcv- yes..life has to move on..
dyer - 'strange it is...for sometimes', yes life is strange!!
'everythin seems to go on forever...when everythin ends..just like that!...', thr r certain things fr which we feel sure dat atleast they will remain,bt i agree smtimes it ends jus lik dat.
dats strange n painful..
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